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LIGHTNING SHOOT!! SHOOT 1-PROLOGUE OF KAMIYA HITSUGASHI

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[b]menceritakan kamiya hitsugashi.. seorang siswa sma yang ingin menjadi pemain sepak bola profesional... dia pun masuk ke sma higashi... sekolah yang tidak memiliki klub sepak bola yang bagus,, namun,dia tetap akan berjuang untuk menang!![/b] [b]mohon komentarnya ya..dan jangan lupa vote...usulannya ku tampung untuk kemajuan berarti ^^ [/b]
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  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    menjawab komentar kripik pades....

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 19 April, 2011 - 21:17.
    5

    lagi2 masalah scanner...-_-
    hohohoho....klo masalah coretan sih dah ada di buku kenangan masa kecil..tinggal usaha menuangkannya ke dalam digital yang cukup rumit dari segi lain....
    sebenernya ini alurnya kupercepat,,,karena ku gak mungkin bisa mengupload komik lightning shoot semuanya sekaligus...
    masalah bahasa....aku sedikit pake buku kamus,tanya temen yang dari italy..dan terakhir nyocokin font....

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • manusia suci's picture

    mirip

    Submitted by manusia suci (not verified) on 16 April, 2011 - 20:23.
    5

    komiknya dibuat dari kamu masih sd???

  • Yui's picture

    kamiya

    Submitted by Yui on 16 April, 2011 - 16:10.
    5

    kamiya keren....^^

  • Yui's picture

    kamiya

    Submitted by Yui on 16 April, 2011 - 16:10.
    5

    kamiya keren....^^

  • light's picture

    italiano??

    Submitted by light (not verified) on 16 April, 2011 - 10:21.
    5

    ceritanya lumayan seru....
    tapi itu dipage yg terakhirdi upload maksudnya bahasa italiano ya??

  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    bingung...

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 27 March, 2011 - 20:16.
    5

    jadi bingung..mau jawab komentar siapa dulu...
    abis komentarnya gilee.....panjang2 bener kaya story -_-

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • Crow's picture

    good luck

    Submitted by Crow on 27 March, 2011 - 11:13.

    good luck

    I am not person worthy of your concern
  • Crow's picture

    good luck

    Submitted by Crow on 27 March, 2011 - 11:12.

    good luck

    I am not person worthy of your concern
  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    yes

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 27 March, 2011 - 08:46.
    5

    i will going to cintinue all of mine one by one...
    you know,,,in the next month,,i will have an exam...and i dont have nytime to continue this comics right now....

    absolutely,yes....

    just take a month for next page....
    i won't hesitate anymore to make my comics be better... Laughing out loud

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • Crow's picture

    it seems like you did a lot

    Submitted by Crow on 27 March, 2011 - 07:59.
    2

    it seems like you did a lot of things here,
    there is a little flaw tough, but not a big deal, since u made it using mouse and all...
    i think you'll become a nice artist,
    just, there is something in my mind.
    are you going to continue everything you've made so far?

    I am not person worthy of your concern
  • shuichi_akai's picture

    well done

    Submitted by shuichi_akai on 24 March, 2011 - 10:29.
    5

    i really admire you...
    you made all of them by a digital and mouse....i didnt suppose you could have done this one...but you really made it come true....
    keep on working and you'll get better!!

    SHUICHI AKAI BEST REGARDS FEDERAL BUREAU OF INVESTIGATION...
  • roelworks's picture

    satujoh

    Submitted by roelworks on 20 March, 2011 - 12:01.
    1

    setuju dengan dua mbak2 itu (addgini dan malya) ...wekekek

  • addigni's picture

    I think you should just use a scanner

    Submitted by addigni on 20 March, 2011 - 09:23.
    3

    I think you should just use a scanner. I understand that you don't have a scanner but you could always borrow your friend's or go to a library or something...
    The reason I'm saying this is because (other than what malya has pointed out regarding the cons of using a mouse) you actually can draw well but unfortunately your comics become amateur-ish because of:

    1) the stiff outlines (e.g. its very polygonal)
    2) the bright, basic color (which makes everything seem sort of out-of-place)

    so I think that your comics will look much neater and more professional if you just draw it by hand, scan, then just use different shades of gray (that way you don't have to worry about the colors blending together since you're only using 1 color ^_^)

    sorry if I'm being annoying ^^;

    If there are people above you, don't forget you are above someone else too
  • malya's picture

    Sudah lumayan, Ky... cuma

    Submitted by malya on 20 March, 2011 - 08:56.
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    Sudah lumayan, Ky... cuma masih tetep "memaksa" kiky untuk coba cari scanner aja, deh hehehehe. (takut itu pergelanganmu sakit dan nggak bisa menggambar biasa lagi) <-- ini bukan nakutin, ya. aku sudah ngalami waktu dipaksa mewarnai digital dulu.

    gambar orang bermain bolanya oke. outlinenya saja dipertegas (ditebalkan maksudnya). coba buat pakai layer ganda deh jadi warna yang disapukan bisa dirapikan tanpa menghapus outlinenya. layer atas untuk outline, layer bawah untuk pewarnaan, satu layer lagi untuk efek. Memang jadinya nanti filenya berat, cuma ngeditnya jadi lebih enak.

    tentang pembagian panel: Kiky pakai storyboard nggak? dicoret-coret dulu di kertas nggak? mendingan begitu. Jadi kelihatan hasil per halamannya gimana. Pembagiannya sudah lumayan. Cumabuat yang "awam" sama komik apalagi komik jepang, mungkin akan susah dipahami komik Kiky ini.

    Dari panel 1-4, aku ngerasa Kiky agak terburu-buru untuk masuk ke pertandingan, jadi pengenalan visual tokoh si Kamiya Higasinya jadi kurang kelihatan. Karena Kiky sepertinya mau memperlihatkan dulu siapa sih si Kamiya ini, yang senyumnya mempesonakah, gantengkah, sombongkah, baru memperlihatkan aksinya. Mungkin bisa dengan menambahkan pengenalan tokoh ini seluruh tubuhnya.

    Atau sekalian, langsung saja masuk ke pertandingan, diperlihatkan si Higashi Kamiya ini lagi membobol gawang lawan, dan langsung memperlihatkan betapa jagonya dia. Lalu masuk ke umpatan para pemain lawan itu. Itu bisa juga, terus masuk ke penjelasan karakternya hitsugashi. Ini dari bayanganku ya... kalau nggak cocok ya nggak papa ^^...

    untuk kata2 asing, ini dari google translatekah? untuk mempermudah pembaca gimana kalau pakai Bahasa Indonesia saja tapi dipakaikan italic atau font yang lain. Untuk kata-kata tertentu baru dikasih "bumbu" asli dari negara itu. Misalnya kalau si pengumpat orang jepang: "sial, jago juga dia. Ayo, semua! Ganbarou!!!" mungkin ya... cuma usul,sih... biar pembaca juga bisa menikmati tanpa harus nyureng ngeliatin balon... ^^ menghemat teks juga, kan?

    uidiiih panjang...

    ngomik itu harusnya dinikmati dan bukannya dibuat beban...
  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    udpated

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 20 March, 2011 - 06:44.
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    kini LIGHTNING SHOOT sudah memiliki dua subtitle...
    subtitle home and away,,
    jadi misalkan pemain jepang maka bahasanya jepang,italy bahasanya italy,dan sebagainya...
    terus ikutin komik-komik aku ya ....

    jangan lupa komentarnya dan votenya,,,usulan di tampung..

    makasih ^^

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    xiixixixix :D

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 19 March, 2011 - 17:17.
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    daku tak punya scanner...klo pun bisa ke rental harganya cukup mahal...satu page begini aja bisa makan 2500...
    makanya ku buatnya pake paint plus SAI n terakhir photoshop...

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • CabeIjo's picture

    knapa ga gambar manual

    Submitted by CabeIjo on 19 March, 2011 - 16:55.
    3

    knapa ga gambar manual aj?
    trus scan, baru pake photoshop

  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    makasih

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 19 March, 2011 - 06:28.
    5

    makasih pak sby...lanjutannya di tunggu y ^^

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
  • pakSBY's picture

    wew

    Submitted by pakSBY on 19 March, 2011 - 06:24.

    wew, such a nice story Smile

  • kiky2hikaru's picture

    all

    Submitted by kiky2hikaru on 16 March, 2011 - 17:01.
    5

    karena pembuatan detail gambar komik bola lebih sulit dari komik biasa,,apalagi ku buatnya pake mouse..
    jadinya mohon bersabar y ...^^
    dukung terus karya2 saya...jangan lupa komentar dan votenya ya ^^

    KIKY HIKARU AND YUMI HIKARI.....
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